- Receive "Formula for an Introduction" and "Formula for a Conclusion"
- New Order for Blog Commenting
- Introduction Review - Two different Examples
Period 1 On Your Own:
- Continue Drafting Your Opinion Essay
- Create Blog Comment
- Conference with Mr. Jeffers when you are finished working.
- Only after you're finished, you must begin watching wiki tutorials at the following page: www.mrcoreyjeffers.wikispaces.com/wikitutorials
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Introduction Review
Find the following in the two introductions below:
- Grabber Statement
- Explanation of Grabber
- Thesis Statement
Which of these introductions is more effective and why? (Two extra credit points will be awarded for responding to this post). Please label each part (grabber, explanation, and thesis) in your comment by copying and pasting each part in the comment box.
Introduction Sample #1:
School is boring. That’s why we should change it. There are many things that could be changed about school such as where our lockers are, what food we eat, and how long our classes run.
Introduction Sample #2:
Out of a survey of 400,000 students, 47 percent of them think school is boring. This means that nearly half of school students are bored for over half of the hours they are awake each week (Pearson, 2006). It’s time for schools to make a change. There are many things that could be changed about school such as the location, and size of our lockers, and choosing our locker neighbors. In addition, the nutritional value, the options, and length of our lunches should be changed as well as the students’ choices in their schedules, teachers, and the classes they take.
2 comments:
When I read both of those introductions I knew immediately that the 2nd one was a lot better than the first one. I knew this by that in the 2nd one I could identify the grabber statement and the explanation and the thesis statement. The grabber was a shocking statistic because it said out of a 4oo,ooo survey 47 percent of them are bored at school. The explanation was this means that nearly half of the school students are bored for over half the hours they are awake each week. The three things they are going to talk about that they stated in their thesis statement are location, size and choosing our locker neighbors, the nutritional value, options, and length of our lunches, also choices in schedules, teachers, and classes they take.
Lacie, you are absolutely correct. In addition, you've done a fantastic job of outlining each of the important distinctions between a grabber statement, transition, and thesis as well as why this introduction has a great example of each.
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